adding a 'puff'

 

adding coverlines/ playing with placement

 

altering the sizes of the images and writing to make it more cohesive

 

altering the sizes of the images and writing to make it more cohesive

 

Adding edition number and price

 

experimenting with the layout of coverlines

 

First draft feedback

 Upon having submitted my first draft of my coursework, these are the key changes I need to make:

1. use own photos everywhere on website - there were a few placeholders that will now be updated with new photos I've taken

2. Need to refine design on opening banner to match aesthetic of rest of website

3. create a competition/way for people to send in their versions following the thirty second clip - e.g. what's in YOUR bag?

4. Make it clearer that second page is intended to be a fashion page

5. Use more impactful over lines on Luana cover

6. Experiment with alignments for Ollie cover

7. Align photos better on contents pages (both)

8. STRENGTHEN DIGITAL CONVERGENCE between magazine and website

9. overall more content on website

This feedback is really helpful as it has helped me understand what people would like to see more of within the website particularly, as I know it was lacking in content. I am going to add original photos, and more interactive articles, so readers can feel included in the world of 'UNTAMED'